Hollow
by joetwo
When I young there was this girl. Sally was her name. She was gorgeous, a real stunner. Always doing well. She was the most popular person in school. Many claimed to despise her. But I’m sure they secretly admired her. I know I did. I thought she was everything in the world, she was a goddess to misfits like us. She never so much as looked at me though, except when she needed something.
She went out with Jason, the head of the athletics team, a match beloved by the gossips. He was handsome and rich, his father owned half the town. They always seemed to be together, all smiles with her arm wrapped around his, dragging him around. He adored her, more than anything, always spending money on gifts for her. She made it a point of telling everyone how much she was in love and how they were to get married. She was destined for things outside here, you could tell. Jason, on the other hand, was fated to stay, to take over his father’s empire.
She finished with school and like so many of us made her way to college. Jason stayed, he had work to do. Their first parting was bitter-sweet, declarations of love and how they would make it work.
Within two months Sally called it off, declaring that she shouldn’t be expected to keep a long distance relationship at her age. Within a few weeks she was seen around campus with a new beau, some rich fellow from the big city. It was like that for years after, she inveigled herself into high society and became a darling of the paparazzi, regularly pictured with some banker or playboy heir.
Jason wasn’t so lucky. He took the break-up hard. They found him at the wheel of his car, pills and a stolen bottle of Whiskey in his hands, and a note, saying that he never knew, could never have guessed, she would be so hollow.
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Made for Trifecta week 32, make a post with the word, Hollow with the meaning or “Lacking in real value or sincerity, or substance; false for meaningless.”
I think every high school has a couple like this. Great descriptions and well written.
Thanks!
)’: Great piece, albeit heart-breaking
Deep, good work here.
there is an earnestness in the narration that i love.
Thanks I appreciate it!
The short sentences really worked well in this. None of the language was overwrought or over-the-top, just straightforward, which heightened the ending nicely. I liked it!
thanks! I consider myself a ‘simple’ writer.
well done – nice descriptions. I remember this couple.
Cool substituting hollow for shallow. Nice half twist.
Thank you. I thought I could have made this one better.
Very nice Joe.
Go raibh Maith Agat!
😦 Poor Jason. It’s funny how the memories of certain kids in school are so crystal clear. But what is it they say about peaking in high school? I suppose just not to do it, lol. Nicely done.
Thanks! They say the same thing here.
I love the cautionary tale feeling to it. It’s vivid and real. Nice work.
Thank you very much.
How sad for him. It’s a shame he never got over her.
It can happen.
oh so sad for jason! although im not sure another ending would be more befitting but it’s such a shame he couldn’t get over it 😦
love the simple language though. i could never hit that mark despite all efforts =\
Don’t sell yourself short. I don’t consider myself a good writer by any stretch of the imagination. Good luck with your own efforts.
Jason should have just had the bottle of whisky … death for someone so hollow is definitely not worth it 🙂
Sometimes it is hard to think that.